Your analysis of the poem follows a very strong structure and contains all the key components required by the examination.
To develop it further it would pay to look a little more closely at the poem itself. The use of personification “The sewers threw up” or hyperbole “the sea spilt out of the sky” probably went further to evoke the ideas you’re dealing with than the ones you chose (though I’d not want you to remove your observations from the answer as these were also good, and useful)
“Risk! Risk anything! Care no more for the opinions of others, for those voices. Do the hardest thing on earth for you. Act for yourself. Face the truth.”
(Katherine Mansfield)
Hi Jono,
Your analysis of the poem follows a very strong structure and contains all the key components required by the examination.
To develop it further it would pay to look a little more closely at the poem itself. The use of personification “The sewers threw up” or hyperbole “the sea spilt out of the sky” probably went further to evoke the ideas you’re dealing with than the ones you chose (though I’d not want you to remove your observations from the answer as these were also good, and useful)
Looks like you’re set for tomorrow.
CW